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12 Outstanding Airman of the Year

Award Cat: NCO
Winner: SQU

AFI 36-2805 para 3.4









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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE
- Leadership, imagination, and initiative--his daily tools as a highly motivated Noncommissioned Officer
- Handpicked from a stellar list of functional experts to test a web-enabled priority automated sourcing system
  -- The first Supply application accessed through the AF Portal and hosted on the AF integration framework
  -- Single-handedly reviewed, updated, and validated over 100 plans used to functionally test the program
  -- Provided low-bandwidth application for the deployed user--gave the warfighter a tool to manage high
     priority orders with only a computer and internet connectivity--identified 16 defects--saved $16K in rework
- Number one choice as Test Director system administrator--key role in successful transition to automation
  -- Saved 40 hours per month in configuration management of non-automated test documents--managed and
     organized over 1400 test plans on a daily basis--implemented automated email notification of defects
  -- Successfully trained 12 co-workers on the use of this tool--increased consistency and accuracy of testing
- Service before self--enthusiastically accepted duties as a Flight Chief for the Maxwell/Gunter Honor Guard
  -- Motivated trainer--trained and molded 12 new members to proudly represent fellow comrades--112 hours
  -- Phenomenal manager--coordinated 59 funerals and 10 other details while personally involved in 34 funerals
  -- Traveled 6,718 miles to 23 Alabama towns/cities for veterans of US Armed Forces--dedicated 234 hours
- Widely respected for his technical expertise--selected to assess the "Rational Suite Test Studio" software
  -- Selection crucial to implemention of the strategy to support centralized testing of 3 integrated wholesale/ retail 
     applications hosted on disparate environments involving 36 testers to support the #1 supply priority
  -- Involved in every phase of the test--established secure LAN connections--processed/validated 50 scripts
  -- Has the confidence of Supply management--they accepted his recommendation to purchase without question
- Embraces new challenges-developed test strategy for the ILS-S Audit Trail component--enables a single
  repository for AF supply applications to store/retrieve audit trail data--eliminates redundant AF development
  -- Coordinated a joint test effort that involved three geographically separated test environments and systems
  -- Solved connectivity issues across multiple environments/systems--paved the way for other ILS components
  -- Tested 120 scenarios and identified 35 defects--early identification saved the government $240K in rework
- True professional--named Supply Division NCO of the Quarter for Jan-Mar 03 out of eleven eligible

SIGNIFICANT SELF IMPROVEMENT
- A highly motivated individual; completed a Humanities CLEP exam toward CCAF degree--12 hrs to complete
  -- Dedicated to be the best--completed two books about management--"FISH" and "Who Moved My Cheese"
  -- In preparation for the NCO academy he took it upon himself to complete two CBT courses in grammar
- Possessed outstanding technical knowledge--selected to attend training for "Quick Test Pro"/"Test Director"
  -- Lead functional for implementation of testing tools--projected to reduce testing time by 40 hours per release
- Has a thirst for knowledge; attended a week long class--"Intro to Java" computer based language used in web
  based applications--positioned himself to lead training of all testers in the development of automated scripts
- Certified flight instructor--completed 20-hr Federal Aviation Agency Biannual Flight Instructor Safety course

BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT
- A dynamic NCO; delivered over 100 meals to the community's elderly through the meals on wheels program
- Supports the Sung Ae Won orphanage in Pusan South Korea by providing assistance in writing letters of
  request for visas and other authorizations using the English Language
--decreased delays of visas by 50%
- Team player; during a fund raiser for the Maxwell/Gunter Honor Guard unit he volunteered and took on the
  responsibility of being one of two cooks who did all the cooking for over 350 personnel--raised over $1200
- Appreciates sacrifice of others! Participated on the flag folding team for retirements of three co-workers
- Puts others before himself--supported Habitat for Humanity in completing a home for a local family of three
- Actively seeks opportunities both on/off duty; donated time to the adopt a mile program, assisted with holiday 
  luncheons--fellowship enjoyed by 85 members--personally organized 4 morale days for Honor Guard troops

Note: 

This is a good package but there are a number of structure errors.  The most important thing about writing to remember is that each line is a bullet, not a sentence (see below).  Although similar, bullets do NOT have punctuation, and the structure follows, ACTION - IMPACT.  Sometimes there will be an opening clause, but don't get carried away with that. 

If the bullet contains "the" it needs to be revised. 
If the bullet contains the pronouns, "he", "she",  "himself" or "herself" revise.

  Example of how to make full sentances bullets:

- Supports the Sung Ae Won orphanage in Pusan South Korea by providing assistance in writing letters of
  request for visas and other authorizations using the English Language
--decreased delays of visas by 50%

ought to read something like:

- Supports the Sung Ae Won orphanage in Pusan South Korea; provided assistance writing visa request letters and other authorizations using the English Language--decreased visa delay from XX weeks to X weeks

  -- The first Supply application accessed through the AF Portal and hosted on the AF integration framework

ought to read something like: (it depends on if this was a review as the main bullet stated, or a creation.  The other supporting bullets had nothing to do with review, so ... )

  -- Created first supply application accessed through AF Portal and hosted on AF integration framework


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