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First Sergeant of the Year

Award Cat: First Sergeant
Winner: Squ









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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTY:
- No one better! #1 of 20 base 1st Sgts...represents 3.3K enlisted...only active duty <type> wg in AF
- Undaunted...served four squadrons/over 1.3K military members/families on <BASE> during CY 02
  -- Out front serving our people! Lauded by ### ??W/CC as "best operational Shirt on <BASE>!"
- Sought after mentor...selected to train SNCOs considering special duty as first shirt...CCM's advisor
  -- Trained, advised and guided "shadow" through difficult trng...trainee boarded...awaiting school
  -- Supervised and trained "under shirt" for each unit...ensured complete coverage during absences
- Leader of the pack...developed physical training program for 30 troops struggling with AF standards
  -- Dramatically improved members' fitness and job performance...26 met standard within 1 month
- Flawless...orchestrated assumption of command with only 1-hour notice on first day in new squadron
  -- Briefed flight commanders, organized troops and coordinated protocol issues...amazing success
- Shared knowledge...critical to Enl Professional Development Crs Committee...curriculum advisor
  -- Vol'd as instructor for FTAC, NCO Enhancement and Airmen Leadership School...800+ affected
- ALS Advisory Council mbr...worked w/ base agencies...improved learning environment for PME
  -- Future upgrades directly influenced 240 students who attended 8 classes at <BASE>'s ALS this year
- Lauded as #1 instructor...Alcohol/Drug Abuse Prevention/Treatment block...focus on improvement
  -- Members involved in alcohol incidents know ramifications of actions...minimized recidivism rate
- Focused...covered duties for newly established/largest base unit following sudden illness of first shirt
  -- Provided guidance to ### SQ/CCs during critical time...ensured success of units with 700+ assigned
- Morale-minded...ACC's most dynamic LD/HD operations...479 personnel deployed to SWA/OEF
  -- Entrusted with families receiving "best care available"...organizational excellence award winner
- Commander's dream...critical to creation/organization of spouses support groups for two squadrons
  -- Lauded by spouses as integral means for information/networking...no mbr's families "disengaged"
- Organized Spouses Appreciation Day...allowed spouses to see what partner does serving the USAF
  -- Allowed for better appreciation for the ## ?QS "big picture"...flight on an HC-130...70+ involved
- Worked w/###  MXS Support Grp to provide family childcare/meals following illness/hospitalization
  -- Ensures family allowed recovery time in a less stressful environment...novel solution to tough prob
- Planner and organizer of the Thanksgiving Turkey Shoot--single largest fund-raiser for first sergeants
  -- Raised $2.2K for "Helping Our Own"...aided 60 <BASE> families with $5K+ during Christmas
- Rock solid...extensive enforcement of standards...7 Article 15s, 4 court-martials and 6 discharges
  -- Flawless processing effort…packages submitted without errors...justice served/not delayed
- Innovative resource...tapped Family Support Center resources...conducted group family care training
  -- Tailored counseling for deployed members' families...unique/challenging family issues resolved
- Solid...?QW/CC handpicked for toughest unit...produced amazing, immediate and lasting results
  -- Transformed marginal unit to first rate...significantly improved standards, teamwork and morale
  -- Implemented solutions...drastic DUI cuts...from wing's highest to zero...innovative approach
- "Mr. Fix-it!" Created unit dorm room of quarter program...inspired residents of oldest dorm on base
  -- Earned Wg Dormitory of the Quarter for Apr-Jun 02...first time ever/perpetual last place finisher
  -- Procured $5K for dormitory enhancement...large screen TV/DVDs...huge morale booster for 100
- Organizer/emcee for ###th Logistics Group Quarterly Awards, ##th Operations Grp Commander's
  Call and Quarterly Awards, first ###th Maintenance Group Quarterly Awards...professional results
- Created new award programs for ###th Maintenance Squadron: "Diamond Warrior" and "Chief's
  Warrior" awards to recognize enlisted troops...on-the-spot acknowledgment of superior performance
- Inspired mentoring proved successful--five qrtr award winners...nine Senior Airmen Below-the-Zone
- Pivotal to Thanksgiving Cheer program...90 families wing-wide received 270+ bags of groceries

SIGNIFICANT SELF-IMPROVEMENT:
- Sets example...earned degree in Human Resources Mgt from Community College of the Air Force
  -- Completed 18 semester hours this year...second CCAF degree in secondary AFSC...right balance
  -- Accumulated 88 semester hrs toward Bachelor of Science Degree in Human Resource Management
- Expanded skills...attended 40 hrs of basic/advanced facilitator trng in Critical Incident Stress Mgt Crs
  -- Vital base asset...provided services following death of active duty mbr/murder of civilian employee
- Information is knowledge...completed 8 hours of commander/first sergeant family support center trng
  -- Wide ranging subjects on suicide/drug abuse...ensured tools were available/ready for first-hand use
- Sought opportunity to learn distractors of trps...setup "ride along" program w/ AFOSI...fully engaged
  -- Increased awareness of drug/gang activity in community...improved ability to brief info to airmen
- Expanded/refreshed knowledge of military traditions…conducted research…open ranks inspections
  -- Enhanced drill/ceremony knowledge...enforced standards/built AF pride...mission ready airmen
- Mission focused...trusted agent trained...critical to unit urinalysis program improvements locally
- Dedicated to fitness…completed 250+ hours physical fitness activity...improved ERGO score 10%
- Completed all wing commander's runs...led unit PT program 3 times per wk...top combat condition
- Enhanced public speaking...taught "Role of the 1st Sgt" for NCO Enhancement...5 times/60 students
- Honed writing skills...authored articles...published in squadron newsletter...experience shared
- Gained invaluable insight...attended brief by local DA on domestic abuse ramifications..shared info

BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- Recognized achiever...Chairman, 2002 Annual Awards Committee...largest wing event of the year
  -- Negotiated contract with off-base venue...received local sponsorship...saved $2.5K...served 460+
  -- Professional ceremony ensured <BASE>'s finest were recognized by both <BASE> and civic leaders
- Recognized leader by peer group...elected President of <BASE>'s First Sergeant's Council for 2003
  -- Chosen to represent <BASE> at ACC/Worldwide conferences...worked on future AF fitness prgm
- Volunteer at Southland Church...active in toddler ministry...forum to teach Christian values to youth
  -- Involved in church missions: food pantry, clothes closet, Angel Tree, His Hands, Color Guard, etc.
- Pacesetter...critical to success of <BASE> Top-3 Association...advisor to SNCO induction committee
  -- Instructor for SNCO Orientation Crs...active participant in fund-raisers/meetings...always willing
- Contagious leadership...renovated facility into Airmen's Centralized Dayroom...supports 1.7K troops
  -- Replaced walls and carpet...installed games and TVs...raised dorm quality of life...saved $25K
- Excellent speaker...narrated Team <BASE> promotion ceremony...honored newly promoted NCOs
  -- Scripted professional ceremony commemorating promotion of 35 NCOs to grades of SSgt to CMSgt
- Leads from the front...challenged fellow first shirts to support vigil on POW/MIA Recognition Day
  -- First Sergeants stood watch for 5 of 24 hrs...covered hard-to-fill mid-night hours...paid full honors
- Non-stop performer...created, developed and organized first-ever <BASE> AFB Goofy Golf Tourney
  -- Encouraged participation from local personalities...raised $300+ for personnel...enhanced morale
- Key to Super Sports Day success…assisted shirts with beverages…assisted Top-3 with food prep
  -- Important morale event...brought base populace together...competitive spirit...ostered teamwork
- Huge base wide impact...chosen to present Enl Family Scholarship/ALS DG Awds during ceremonies
- Visible...coordinated with Officer's Spouses Club for auction...raised $4K for dependent scholarships
- Requested by AFOSI detachment commander to organize and emcee awards and decoration ceremony
- Mindful of our youth...pre-kindergarten reading prgm...helped kids learn value of reading/education
- Remembered past heros...grillmaster for Retiree Appreciation Day...57 retirees well fed/appreciated
- Always giving...organized unit's Annual Airmen's cookie drive...holiday spirit for 73 dorm residents
- Prepared food and served food to 500+ troops during Unaccompanied Airman's Thanksgiving dinner
- Out front on Thanksgiving Day...served meals at dining facility...shared holiday with troops/families
- Community focus...coordinated donations...73 local needy families received $28K in food and gifts
- Organized cookouts for 140 dorm residents...engaged Top-3 for monetary support...increased morale
- Coordinated w/ area JROTC units for region-wide softball tourney...officiated games...youth mentor
- Top notch...Chairman/1st Sgt fund-raising committee...raised $31K+ through events and donations
- Mentored 10 base honor guard members...completed 225 details...ensured veterans received honors
- Absolute best...make no mistake...achievements mandate selection as NAF First Sergeant of Year!

Note:

  Not a bad award.  Author changed the way they addressed Squadron, it was either ### or ###th.  The best thing is to pick one method and stick to it.  The other item that stuch out was the transistion for 1st shirt, 1st sergeant, and first sergeant....  pick one and stick to it.  Finally, there was one spelling error and a couple of numbering errors.  Numbers under 10 spelled out unless they deal with time or follow numbers larger than 10 in the same bullet.


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