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AF LT. Gen. Leo Marquez Maintenance Award (FY04)

Award Cat: Technician (AMN)
Winner: Yes

AFI 36-2845

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The following Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

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- Deployed 45 days to Combined Air Operations Center <NAME> (CAOC-?), <BASEX> as (?AFB), as
  network technician in direct support of Blue Flag 05-02-- Key player in exercise setup and execution
- Configured multi-layer switching network equipment to support over 500 clients during exercise Blue Flag 05
  -- Greatly contributed to exercise success by providing a modern, high-speed coalition network to participants
  -- Meticulously administered four networks to support 517 US operators and 88 coalition partners to
     accomplish 1,620 combat air strike sorties; enabled US and coalition target integration of air tasking orders
- 1st picked out of 15 peers for special deployment to Combined Air Operations Center (CAOC)
  -- Ran and correctly labeled 25,000+ feet of fiber optic networking cable; enabled 850 new network drops
  -- Worked 48 hours dedicated to restructuring CAOC local area network cables reducing cable traffic by 10%
- Isolated and repaired four Cisco router central processing units by reconfiguring corrupted operating systems;
  prevented units from being sent to Cisco repair depot and saved Air Force over 80 thousand dollars

- Troubleshot and repaired Video Teleconferencing System; isolated problem to improper connections leading
  to signal loss; enabled Blue Flag 05-02 players to conference with six sites and Secretary of the Air Force.
-Assisted in configuration and installation of five Secure Internet Protocol computer clients to Air Combat
  Command network-- Increased availability of classified command and control terminals to flight personnel
- Installed new fiber path/switch supporting Intelligence Cell’s AccessNet radio system; facilitated constant
  communications during wartime conditions between battle management cell and forward deployed personnel
- Organized unit storage facility; helped install 15 racks, increasing availability of space by 4,900 square feet
  -- Provided secure area for over $20M in comm assets used to support real-world mission/training exercises
- Key player to secure Secret Internet Protocol Network (SIPR) after Information Security Scan
  --Troubleshoot 175 possible vulnerabilities and expanding proficiency of the SIPR network in the TAOC
- Proactive! Assisted in Network Operations work center reconfiguration, rearranged TAOC server room
  equipment and relocated various supplies and tools; increased space for maintenance and training by 40%
  -- Constructed scaled down version of the TAOC network for training of new personnel--training enhanced
-Troubleshot Cisco processing unit and a Cisco 6500 chassis which were malfunctioning; Quickly isolated
  problem to faulty chassis and initiated immediate repair actions to bring critical TAOC network back on-line

-Attended specialized Asynchronous Trunking Module Switch training in <BASE Y>
  --Utilized training to build a data connection between <BASEX> and <BASEY> in support of BF 05-02
- Developed technical solutions for constantly changing theater network and communications requirements
  -- Directly involved with implementation of most efficient network design topology ever in the AOR
- Authored network section's repair guide; stating proper standards and procedures of network troubleshooting
  -- reduced network troubleshooting and down time by 20%, guaranteeing continuous network connectivity
- Spearheaded formulation of work center File Plan and Corrosion Prevention and Control program procedures
  -- Managerial Evaluators recognized dedication; inspection yielded no discrepancies and 4 commendable items
- Provided category five termination training to four Core workcenter personnel-- training saved eight hours of
  manpower by empowering newly trained personnel to cable up 42 computer clients on Training AOC floor
- Installed telephone system in training center--enabled technicians to train on Voice Over Internet Protocol
  (VOIP) equipment before deploying and operating mission-essential equipment--achieved VOIP certification
- Extremely talented! Dilligently installed backup Theater Battle Management Core Systems suite for CAOC
  creating a unique networking schematic used to patch spare servers onto the live system with no interruption

- Awarded Distinguished Graduate upon completing Air Operations Center Initial Qualification Training course


 This award has a number of errors.  First, spelling and capitalization errors.  next were acronym errors.  TAOC was never spelled out within the award and ATM is Asynchronous Transfer Mode not Asynchronous Trunking Module.  there were a couple of numbering errors within, but nothing to serious.  One thing that is noticeable is the use of monthly awards within this annual.  It shows the dedication of the writer to taking care of their airmen.  If it wasn't for these errors, this award may have done even better than it did.  Remember it only takes a minute to run spell check.  Take the minute, your products will look that much better.



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