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AF LT. Gen. Leo Marquez Maintenance Award (FY04)

Award Cat: Technician (AMN)
Winner: Yes

AFI 36-2845









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The following Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

SUSTAINED JOB PERFORMANCE
- Lead network technician in Exercise Blue Flag 05-02--expanded secure network to support 1,000 additional
  users, tripling the system capacity in just one month--ensured operational success of joint training exercise
- Integral to design, implementation, and activation of a secure coalition network needed to seamlessly plan
  air campaign with our coalition partners--solidified bond with allies and improved war fighting capabilities
- Skillfully installed unique cable television infrastructure to display four Unmanned Aerial Vehicle video feeds
  -- Battlefield visibility enabled leadership to make command decisions--positively affected exercise outcome
- Pivotal member during the setup of Combined Forces Air Component Commander's real world secure network
  -- Configured classified networking devices--enabled seamless transition of communication for remote location
- Key member in isolation and repair of host unit's Video Teleconferencing equipment (VTC)--quickly rerouted
  fiber optic connection--eliminated line degradation and enabled conferences to continue without interruption
- Implemented secure Layer 2 connection to remote location--ensured distribution of four classified networks to
  Joint forces--enabled air defense system integration and improved communication between sister services
- Talented technician! Constructed unique interface cable to connect cryptographic units to Joint Range Extension
  -- Provided essential tactical data link redundancy--enhanced warfighter's primary tool for viewing air picture
- Superb resourcefulness--utilized existing spare cabling components to reconstruct faulty camera control cable
  -- Valiant efforts quickly restored operation of critical real world VTC equipment--saved $500 in repair costs
- True work horse! Skillfully utilized network expertise to isolate and repair multiple communication faults
  -- Quick response ensured clients could perform network duties and enabled completion of server upgrade

JOB EFFICIENCY AND RESULTS
- Spearheaded training class on fabrication of multi-mode fiber-optic cables and connectors--impact instantly
  felt--trained team installed over 4,000 feet of cables--improved network performance and removed latency
- Provided Army personnel with in-depth network operations training to include configuration, operation, and
  troubleshooting of switches/routers--ensured successful execution of multinational exercise operational goals
- Hard charging individual! Configured software based telephone service on 330 Secure Internet Protocol clients
  -- Outstanding achievements greatly increased communication effectiveness and eliminated hardware shortfall
- Productive instructor--used superior skill knowledge to train two network technicians on router configuration
  techniques--technicians used obtained skills while on deployment in support of Hurricane Katrina relief efforts
- Engineered and implemented training network--installed devices to replicate real world network environment
  -- Enabled technicians to gain experience on configuration and troubleshooting practices before deploying
- Troubleshot two Command and Control System clients--quickly reconfigured incorrect network router settings
  -- Virtual Local Area Network outage restored--enabled proficiency training of 11 individuals vital to mission
- Isolated and reconfigured settings between Air Defense System Integrator and access layer switching module
  -- Allowed air picture desimination throughout Training Air Operation Center--sitiuation awareness increased
- Installed network cables and configured routing devices to support Theater Battle Management Core Systems
  suite upgrade--enabled system administrators to streamline installation--increased task proficiency 100 percent

OTHER CONSIDERATIONS
- Fabricated four bulk encryption equipment cables using spare parts--saved unit over $300 in replacement costs
  -- Provided training class ability to simulate long haul communication links--increased training efficiency
- True team player--supported computer systems element--assisted in setup of 114 client positions--eliminated
  50 percent of element's workload and ensured that positions were operational two days ahead of deadline
- Reconstructed flights corrosion control program--cleared discrepancies--removed potential corrosion hazards
- Element consolidated tool kit monitor--accounted for over 200 tools valued at $100K--created/implemented
  unique accountability program--effectively cut daily inventory/accountability time--zero lost tools for the month
- Hand-selected to be squadron cardiopulmonary resuscitation instructor--enhanced unit's life saving capabilities

Note: 

  Very good package.  There were a couple of minor spelling errors, other than that this is excellent demonstration of the writers growth.  The Acronyms were right, the numbering was right, and even the use of "percent" only added a high level of detail to the package.  I commented on the use of percent because many writers will utilize either the word or the symbol within the package, when one or the other is the best.  This shows the ability of the writer. 

More importantly then the writers ability is the work of the Airman in which this is written.  The Airman did very good work and ensured their boss paid attention to it. 

 

   


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