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The following Major General Eugene A. Lupia award example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not change mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

JOB PERFORMANCE: Sets the lead for others to follow outstanding results always speak for themselves!
- Led 18 military/1 civilian employee--completed 1365 maintenance actions/240 direct scheduled word orders
- Managed the installation, inspection, operation, and maintenance of 58 diesel-driven generators, 14 fire deluge
  pumps, electrical distribution switchgear and ancillary equipment valued at $5M supporting HQ ##AF/## BW
- Led emergency overhaul of phase dock hangar fire deluge pump--replaced/adjusted faulty engine components
  -- Restored 100% fire protection coverage of 104,700 square feet industrial hangar and $296 million in aircraft
- Directed installation of 200KW generator--provided 120 hr prime power to aircraft maintenance accessories
  flight--enabled crews to complete two on-time B-52 12 day PMI phase inspections with zero missed sorties
- Upgraded standby power system for 2 LRS data network--processed $675M in line items without interruption
- Finished annual validations at 65 generator sites--certified back-up power realiability for critical C2 facilities

MANAGEMENT ABILITY: Proven professional, cutting-edge leader with subordinates best interest at hand
- Implemented 5-yr plan to upgrade $750K generation equipment of 20 critical facilities--completed 7 in 1 year
- Received 2005 Nuclear Surety Inspection "Excellent" facilities rating/superior performance team recognition
- Incomparable mentor! 3 BTZ promotions, 5 AMN-NCO squadron quarterly, 1 group and 1 NCO annual award
- Managed POL generator install--pumped 109M gallons of fuel and generated over 2900 sorties without delay
- Extensively researched stringent EPA guidelines--implemented antifreeze recycling--saved $15K annually
- Directed arresting barrier support for Air Warrior/Air Adversary exercises for 50K DoD/multinational forces
- Completed SNCO Course-12 in 11 weeks--a phenomenal 41 weeks ahead of schedule--4X faster then required

TECHNICAL COMPETENCE: Relentless pursuit of professional and personal improvement--well above peers
- Wing power production subject matter expert--re-wrote 12 pgs of “Base-X” exercise and contingency op plan
- EET member 500 person Major Accident Response Exercise--validated 05 Air Show emergency procedures
- Completed aircraft arresting system instructor course--developed local training plan--certified 70 firefighters
- Led Silver Flag team--molded 35-man electric element--certified IED/convoy joint-ops task force requirement
- Kept abreast of tech guidelines--completed 40 hour National Electric Code seminar for 2005 code revisions
- Team chief for 20 man "just in time" training at Dobbins AFB--guided 8 personnel to complete CDC core tasks

INITIATIVE: Unparalleled self-starter, continuously strives for new improvements and to be the very best
- Developed and managed Wing's First Time Supervisor Course--skillfully mentored over 480 future AF leaders
  -- Enhanced new leaders with supervisory/management skills and improved wing EPR and decoration quality
- Developed RWP sector charts--streamlined maintenance actions--extended equipment life, production up 50%
- Revised 104 pages emergency power system operation instructions--trained 200 troops on starting procedures
- Lead electrical planner for Combined Air and Space Operations Center--identified $98K generation upgrades
- Self motivated--completed six credits through DANTES testing and two prerequisites for masters in business
- Completed Bachelor of Science degree in Industrial Technology--made prestigious Dean’s Honors list 4 times
- Organized 20 volunteers for “Paint Your Heart Out” local program-- enhanced quality of life for local seniors
- Devoted--completed American Heart External Defibrillators course--only certified operations flight instructor
- Involved--Team-56 officer, First 4 liaison, AOM evaluator, Red Cross, Airman's attic/Youth center volunteer

RESOURCEFULNESS: Unsurpassed energy and drive--loyalty and dedication to improve well above reproach
- Fought for $180K to purchase/install generators at six command facilities--guaranteed reliable/update systems
- Acquired $21K from ACC for cable support loader--reduced disc loading time, manpower/improved safety
- Won Top Superior Performer/Best Maintain Award for adopt-a-plane program restoration of B-58 rocket sled
- Always seeking self improvement--completed 136 hr phase I Microsoft Certified System Administrator Course
- Assisted two national guard bases in Arkansas/Texas to adopt first time supervisory course--enhanced training
- Fiercely devoted--raised and distributed 600 lbs of food to needy from the annual US Postal service food drive
- Manages/maintains/updates Team-56 web page--link keeping E-5/E-6’s abreast on upcoming events/training
- Solicited/donated 35 bags of clothes and toys to Airman’s attic--items will help lower ranking families in need


First off, this is the first time i have ever seen a Major General Eugene A. Lupia award.  So without a solid background on it, i only looked at the structure of the bullets and readability. Overall, this package is very good.  Only a couple of numbering issues and one spelling error.  Definitely something to look at for anyone working on a Major General Eugene A. Lupia award.

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