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Professional Performer of the Month

Award Cat: Amn
Winner: Yes

Local OI

Key Points to Writing
  • WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
  • Don't be afraid to ask for HELP.
  • The only person looking out for either you or your subordinate is YOU!
  • Use a spell checker (F7 in Office) 
  • Remember, writing doesn't have to win to REWARD!
  • Use various writing resources like Merriam-Webster Online.

The following Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

- Assisted in the configuration of the Network Operations Security Center's(NOSC) main network firewall
  -- enabled video teleconference(VTC) between <BASE> and Al-Udeied Air Operation Center command staff
  -- prevented outside viruses, denial of service and hackers from entering secure internet protocol router network
-Troubleshot and repaired 12 Theater Battle Management Core System (TBMCS) connectivity problems
  -- reconfigured NOSC AOR firewalls to allow the United States Navy direct access to secure TBMCS network
  -- assited forward deployed Army Units--removed network configuration faults--restored TBMCS capabilities
-Assisted in the installation of eight Voice Over Secure Information Protocol (VOSIP) conferencing telephones
  -- identified and rectified improper virtual local area network (VLAN) settings--allowed network connectivity
  -- trained distant end technicians on VOSIP VLAN theory and installation practices--ensured smooth transition
-Team Leader for Central Air Forces (CENTAF) Enterprise Network Disaster Backup System installation team.
  -- identified and reconfigured layer two tunnels for four systems--ensured back-up rescourses were available
  -- enabled the Combined Air Operations Center at Al-Udeied Air Base to have an emergency restore point
-Programmed and tested CENTAF/CC's Secure Telephone Equipment(STE) and VOSIP telephone equipment
  -- ensured that commander's telephones had proper line button layout and programming--ensured speed dialing
  -- guaranteed the capability of secure telephone communications bewtween CENTAF/CC and combatant CC's


One thing about monthly award packages is slack given to structure.  In my opinion this is acceptable because it is normally a young/new supervisors first attempts at writing.  (We all have to start somewhere).  Even with that said a couple of things are important even at this level.  #1) Spell Check the package, spelling errors reflect badly on the writer.  Monthly or not, IMT has a spellcheck, USE IT!  #2) Capitalization.  The first letter in every bullet needs to be capitalized.

Although those two items stick out the writer did an outstanding job identifying all of the acronyms and using the method of representing numbers.


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