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Key Points to Writing
  • WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
  • Don't be afraid to ask for HELP.
  • The only person looking out for either you or your subordinate is YOU!
  • Use a spell checker (F7 in Office) 
  • Remember, writing doesn't have to win to REWARD!
  • Use various writing resources like Merriam-Webster Online.

The following Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

- Configured administration server on training network;-- Domain Name Server allowes for network monitoring
- Intructed Sniffer Pro training;-- enabled work center to establish an accurate baseline for network activity
- Enhanced Composite Tool Kit design for element; preventing corrosion and improving asset accountability
- Trobleshot and repaired broken networking equipment;-- saved unit $40K in replacement hardware costs
- Instructed 22 MAJCOM personnel in CPR course; enpowering indivduals with life saving first aid training
- Engineered and constructed patch panel solution for network training suite; eliminated cabling time by 50%
- Attended and Excelled in Wide Area Network Training class;-- Configured inter-nodal communication
  between four data multiplexing devices-- enabled voice and data connectivity between remote locations
- Replaced/configured switch on classified network--allowed successful completion of system training exercise
- Trained two shop technicians in networking principles--increased element's mission ready technicians by 20%

NOTE:

Too many spelling errors!  One is bad, five makes you wonder if the supervisor even cared?  F7 in work or the 8th button over in IMT Viewer.  USE IT.  The spelling error make it hard to really focus on the importance of the lines.  Also, it appears this never made it out of draft with the ";-- ".  Writers pick a format for the award and stick to it.  Either a double dash or a semicolon.  It seems minor but it adds constituency within the package.

 


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