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Professional Performer of the Month

Award Cat: Amn
Winner: Yes

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Key Points to Writing
  • WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
  • Don't be afraid to ask for HELP.
  • The only person looking out for either you or your subordinate is YOU!
  • Use a spell checker (F7 in Office) 
  • Remember, writing doesn't have to win to REWARD!
  • Use various writing resources like Merriam-Webster Online.

The following Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

- Stood up mock Blue Flag 06-01 network--installed devices to replicate actual exercise network environment
  -- Enabled technicians to gain experience on configuration and troubleshooting practices before deployment
  -- Established critical requirements for Voice Over Internet Protocol coalition voice conferencing capabilities
- Troubleshot four Command and Control System clients--quickly reconfigured incorrect network router settings
  -- Virtual Local Area Network outage restored--enabled proficiency training of 12 individuals vital to mission
  -- Enabled Command and Control Operations technicians to stand up last minute clients for joint force exercise
- My top technician! troubleshot and repaired two critical Global Command and Control servers in 10 minutes
  -- Single-handedly identified problem to misconfiguration of local network interface server card settings
  -- Enabled Command and Control operations personnel to remotley conect with battle management systems
- Meticulously restored training Air Operations Center Local Area Network disaster recovery procedures
  -- Provided step by step directions for network technicians to follow in the event of catastrophic system failure
  -- Trained 15 Local Area Network technicians on new procedures--reduced network restoration time by 50%
- Engineered simple deployable network node management and network monitoring and administration systems
  -- Developed solution for rapid implementation of monitoring systems on the Blue Flag 06-01exercise network
  -- Saved nine man hours of server build time by pre-loading and configuring all management system hardware


This is a pretty good package.  The spelling errors detract from it.  take the minute and run spell check.  The most important thing to remember when using "%" is to quantify them.  50% can be 2 to 1, 20 to 10 or 1000 to 500.  Which one sounds better?  Don't leave the reader guessing.


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