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Professional Performer of the Month

Award Cat: Amn
Winner: Yes

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The following Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

-Isolated and repaired four Cisco router central processing units by reconfiguring corrupted operating systems;
  prevented units from being sent to Cisco repair depot and saved Air Force over 80 thousand dollars
-Created new virtual local area network for Theater Battle Management Core System (TBMCS) v1.1.3 suite;
  provided data connectivity to 12 new TBMCS servers providing connectivity for 15 TBMCS clients
-Provided category five termination training to four Core workcenter personnel-- training saved eight hours of
  manpower by empowering newly trained personnel to cable up 42 computer clients on Training AOC floor
-Installed and terminated 200 feet of fiber optic cabling and configured networking equipment for classified
  coalition network; network provides full spectrum data communication between U.S. and coalition partners
-Assisted in configuration and installation of five Secure Internet Protocol computer clients to Air Combat
  Command network-- Increased availability of classified command and control terminals to flight personnel


Pretty Good package.  The only problem I see is in the third bullet.  The numbering issues in this are faulty, and this same bullet will be seen a number of times in this persons writing....  The point, ensure your bullets are good at the lowest level so the higher awards are easier to write. Finally the other minor problem is the missing space between the "-" and first word.  Other than these minor details, the package reads good.


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