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2006 AMERICAN LEGION SPIRIT OF SERVICE AWARD

Award Cat: NCO
Winner: Group









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The following American Legion Sprit of Service Award (Special Awards/Recognition Program) example has been taken out of an IMT document. I did not change mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

- Set the example for 324 Airmen--sacrificed 448.5 community hrs--named ### ABG 2005 Volunteer of the Yr
- Received letter of appreciation--chaplain praised outstanding support/community service to RAF Croughton
- Resourceful! Key player in obtaining USAFE library GSU support materials--new DVDs were a morale boost
- Heartfelt leadership! Invited three Croughton Airmen for T-Day & Xmas day meals--genuine troop caretaker
- Rapidly established dynamic and motivating leader image--coordinated process for Tsunami victim donations
  -- Helped displaced victims recover and earned complete respect and admiration from deployed commander
- Humanitarian! Gave 15 nurturing hours to High Wycombe animal shelter--cared for over 20 abandon animals
- Selfless! Assistant London Central High School Coach--350+ hrs mentoring/leading youngsters, great results
  -- Team reached semifinal appearance--produced six "All Conference" players--best school showing in 6 years
- Spent 20 hours mentoring high school students; stressed importance of academics, and no student left behind
  -- Cornerstone for students traveling & missing school during sports season--kept students on track to graduate!
- Brainchild behind & led Punt, Pass, & Kick fundraiser--raised $1,150+ for LCHS football team uniform items
- Dynamic! Created the 2005 LCHS football team highlight film--presented to parents at Fall Awards ceremony
- Absolutely dedicated to improving team building--provided six Friday night meals for the LCHS football team
- United communities during the RAF Croughton pie social--over 60 local nationals attended for the celebration
  -- Put best foot forward, no job to large or small--help clean and deliver pies to 3 different 24-hr work centers
- Volunteered 2.5 hours supervising and cleaning up for the RAF Croughton Youth Halloween Harvest Party
  -- Developed & orchestrated games for 20 children--provided a safe haven--a huge Halloween night success!
- Security minded! Collaborated with Watlington district community leaders on Neighborhood Watch programs
  -- Programs have made contributions of considerable and lasting value--120 active residents & 55% less crime
- Stimulates harmony and high spirits! Personally invited by Base Chaplin to help infuse holiday community glee
  --Santa’s helper! Decorated Christmas tree, passed out carol sheets, & served hot chocolate--rekindled spirits
- Changed a flat tire for stranded, elderly woman--saved her over $150 in fees and built a friendship for life
- Presented the LCHS football team over $250 of safety equipment for students unable to purchase personal gear
- Intense competitor and model ambassador within the Croughton intramural basketball league--valued teammate
- Showed a positive, cooperative spirit during the Harrow Hospital blood drive--alms potentially saved lives!
- Impact witness in road rage court case--testimony ensured a guilty verdict and made the UK roads safer for all
- Hurricane Katrina disaster godsend--direct personal involvement orchestrated timely food/clothing donations
- Gold-hearted! Selflessly donated items to RAF Croughton British American Committee Toys for Tots drive
- Strong, positive drive toward helping others in need! Continually supported Thailand's Father Ray Foundation
  -- Gifts ensured children had access to food, shelter, medical care, education, and safety from sexual predators
- Radiates energy and extreme enthusiasm while supporting activities at the RAF Croughton community chapel
  -- Active with Rite of Christian Initiation of Adults classes and youth religious education--usher/greeter duties
- Played a leading and aggressive role in establishing continuous care packages to forward deployed members
- Generous contributor to the 2005 Combined Federal Campaign--donation contributed to smashing USAFE goal
- Unit AADD rep; prompt response on two call-outs--key to program success--saved lives & ensured zero DUIs
- Expertly processed and delivered 21M+ lbs of UK destined mail--boosted morale for 40K UK postal patrons
- Unswerving allegiance to duty--transferred 10M+ lbs of UK mail error-free; exceeded $11M in transport costs
- Superbly processed 7.5K air transportation documents--streamlined $2.3M in carrier payments on 13K flights
- Accurately initiated 30 routing/adjustment forms--100% contract compliance/saved $25K in double payments
- Accelerated academic pursuits; completed 21 credit hrs--awarded Transportation Management CCAF Degree
- Masterfully rerouted more than 40K lbs of delayed Baghdad destined mail--improved total uplift by 48 hours
- Engineered rerouting of 800 pieces of OIF mail weighing over 18K lbs--same-day lift/averted 41-hour delay
- Standout amongst peers! Selected as Det ## NCO of the Qtr, 3d Qtr 05 for superb leadership/job performance
- Directly contributed to Det ## earning the 2005 USAFE Outstanding Aerial Mail Terminal of the Year Award

 

Note:

I really like this package, it reads smoothly. (This is also my second look at a Spirit of Service Award, and it is a very good addition to the Site).  There is good attention to detail (only a couple of highlighted errors) and solid quantifiable impact.  The other thing I like is the reference to the winning annual award.Be careful with Acronyms, if some one asks what's NORE, you lost that line to them. The only thing to recommend is to make every bullet quantifiable.  If %, doubled, tripled etc, are used, then they need to be quantified to make the bullet stand out. Finally, watch Numbering Issues, numbers under 10 are spelled out unless they deal with time or follow numbers larger than 10 in the same bullet.


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