Enlisted Recognition Program (Airman of the Quarter, 2nd)
Award Cat: AMN
Key Points to Writing
- If you haven't already, take
a writing class
- WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
- Don't be afraid to ask for HELP.
- The only person looking out for either you or your subordinate is YOU!
- Use a spell checker (F7 in Office)
- Remember, writing doesn't have to win to REWARD!
- Use various writing resources like Merriam-Webster Online.
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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTY
- #1 of 12 airmen in element; always looking for challenges; consistently
displayed initiative and
commitment; possesses NCO-level tenacity and leadership skills--epitome
- Attended specialized Asynchronous Trunking Module Switch training in
-- Utilized training to build a data connection between <BASE>
and <BASE> AFB in support of BF 05-02 .
- Troubleshot Cisco processing unit and a Cisco 6500 chassis which were
malfunctioning; Quickly isolated
problem to faulty chassis and initiated immediate repair actions to bring
critical TAOC network back on-line
- Configured multi-layer switching network equipment to support over 500 clients
during exercise Blue Flag 05
-- Greatly contributed to exercise success by providing a modern,
high-speed coalition network to participants
- Deployed 45 days to Combined Air Operations Center
<BASE> (CAOC-?), <BASE>(?AFB), as
network technician in direct support of Blue Flag 05-02-- Key player in
exercise setup and execution
-- Meticulously administered
four networks to support 517 US operators
and 88 coalition partners to
accomplish 1,620 combat air strike sorties; enabled US
and coalition target integration of air tasking orders
- Troubleshot and repaired Video Teleconferencing System; isolated problem to
improper connections leading to
signal loss; system enabled Blue Flag 05-02 players to conference with
six sites and Secretary of the Air Force.
- Repaired data link between <BASE> ANG base and <BASE> AFB; enabled data feed
between both bases
- Dedicated to physical fitness--achieved an amazing 100 composite score on new
Air Force fitness program,
placed in the upper two percent of the squadron; formally recognized by
the squadron commander in June 2005
Completed 2 hours of computer-based training towards
his Cisco Network
Associate Certification; Used
knowledge gained to serve as a
technical consultant in the set up and implementation of a local area training
network providing training to 25 military and 1 civilian personnel.
BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- Donated notebooks and paper to local Sumter County school district's "Back on
the Bus" program.
-- materials collected provide much needed school supplies to underprivileged
children in 31 local schools.
- Strong supporter of unit activities; played in the ###th Computer Operations
Squadrons booster club's golf
Raised $1000 in funds to offset the
cost of the annual holiday party.
IMHO, this package is very bad. It appears the writer's chain of
command failed him. There is a lot of good information in this package but
there are too many errors for a quarterly package. After the first bullet,
the problems started. First, ATM = Asynchronous Transfer Mode not
Asynchronous Trunking Module.
When you write, make sure you know what you are talking about. After this, there
are what I call, "Super Bullets".
"Supper Bullets" are over three lines including sub-bullet, included in this are
three line primary bullets. A three line primary bullet should and can be
separated into a primary and sub-bullet. After this seven of the bullets
are actual sentences. If
any line contains a pronoun, it
ought to be revisited at as should any line that contains punctuation. The
spelling errors, were
capitalization issues and there were only two minor
As a writer,
new or otherwise, find someone to look over your work. If you are entrusted in
looking over someone else's work, take it seriously. A supervisor who
doesn't know how to write, their airmen will suffer. Finally, take time
and review both the Tongue and
Quill and Preparing
Official Communications they are the bases for AF writing.