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Enlisted Recognition Program (SNCO of the Quarter, 3rd)

Award Cat: SNCO
Winner: Squ









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LEADERSHIP/JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTY: Striking outcomes always speak for themselves
- Aided commander in $1.6M financial plan development--specified $300K contract cuts--MAJCOM mandated
- Coordinated $22K Dougherty Center sound system install--dynamic full-time use of room mic for wing standup
- Piloted $103K Lodging High Speed Internet install--MAJCOM priority--allowed Barksdale guests vital comm
- Oversaw $225K Protected Distribution System upgrade--rectified SIPRNet write-ups--increased security 80%
- Experty briefed Communications Forum--wing leadership now armed with full mission impact of deployments
- Directed AEF deployment readiness--launched 50 members to six worldwide locations supporting OIF/OEF
- Streamlined squadron Personnel Readiness system of pre-deployment prep--reduced pax processing time 50%
- Governed SORTS/ART Reporting of 274 personnel--identified deployment shortfalls--depicted posture to AF
- Corroborated unit CINC Installation Excellence award inputs--allowed DoD recognition of base-wide efforts
- Leading the way--base pilot remote desktop tester--enhanced SIPRNet security and reduced man-hours by 75%
- Proactive deployment manager--primed members and cargo for NORE--unit success with zero discrepancies
- Orchestrated $384K alternate fiber path base-wide--yielded redundant network pathways--doubled reliability
- Managed $163K weather system upgrade--centralized weather forecast ability--44K man-hours saved yearly
- Processed 1.6K work order requirements--ensured customer solutions properly identified--1.5K implemented

SIGNIFICANT SELF-IMPROVEMENT: Always seeks personal growth to supplement CCAF and BS degrees
- Completed 5/7 level requirements--268 tasks, 15 QTPs, 12 CBTs, 4 CDCs in 4 mo--11 mo ahead of minimum
- Outstanding performance--85% on CDC course examination--recognized by commander--received 1-day pass
- Active Conqueror’s Toastmaster Member--facilitated brief of 35 StarBase LA students on personal experience
- First sergeant force multiplier--attended 4-day 1st Sgt symposium--procured vital SNCO leadership wisdom

BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT: Lives AF’s core values daily--“service before self” personified
- Dedicated recognition programs leader--directs squadron AOM program--organized <SQU> Aug AOM board
- Managed First Time Supervisors Course--garnered classes for 120 NCOs--armed leaders with needed tools
- Zealous Wing Top-3 member--dining-out/SNCO induction committee--organized AADD, PA system, greeters
- Positive mentor to <NAME> middle school--led yearbook staff to sell over $1.5K in ads for 50th Annv Edition

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Good package.  Only a couple of problems minor problems.  Be careful with Acronyms, if some one asks what's NORE, you lost that line to them. The only thing to recommend is to make every bullet quantifiable.  If %, doubled, tripled etc, are used, then they need to be quantified to make the bullet stand out.


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