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Award Examples
Enlisted Recognition Program (Airman of the Year)
Award Cat: Amn
Winner: ???
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Key Points to Writing
- WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
- Ask for HELP, the only person looking out for #1 is you.
- The only person looking out for your subordinates is YOU!
- Use a spell checker. F7 works well in MS Word.
- Use Merriam-Webster Online
to improve your vocabulary.
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The following Example has been taken from an AF1206 - IMT so the formatting
might be off. I did not changed mission information,
only names to protect myself and the
people I have received the information from. If
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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY
DUTY
- Deployed 45 days to Combined Air Operations Center (CAOC) <BASE>, in direct
support of Blue Flag 05-02
-- Greatly contributed to exercise success by providing a modern,
high-speed coalition network to participants
- Configured multi-layer switching network equipment to support over 500 clients
during exercise Blue Flag 05
-- Meticulously administered
four
networks to support 517 US operators and 88 coalition partners to quickly
accomplish 1,620 combat air strike sorties;
enabled US and coalition target integration of air tasking orders
- 1st picked by element leadership out of 15 peers for special contingency
deployment to Al-Udied CAOC
-- Ran and labeled 25K+ feet of fiber optic networking cable--quickly
created 850 new network access points
-- Worked 48 hours dedicated to
restructuring CAOC local area network cables reducing cable traffic by 10%
- Isolated and repaired four CISCO router central processing units by
reconfiguring corrupted operating systems;
prevented units from being sent to CISCO repair depot and saved Air Force
over $80 in part acquisition costs
- Troubleshot and repaired Video Teleconferencing system--isolated problem to
improper connections leading
to signal loss--enabled Blue Flag 05-02 players to conference with six
sites and Secretary of the Air Force
- Lead technician in Secure Internet Protocol Network (SIPR) information
assurance security assessment scan
-- troubleshot 175 vulnerabilities--repaired all discrepancies in the
Training Air Operations Center (TAOC)
- Assisted in the in the installation and configuration of five SIPR computer
clients to United States Central Air
Forces network--increased availability of classified command and control
terminals to flight personnel by 20%
- Installed new fiber path/switch supporting Intelligence Cell’s AccessNet radio
system--facilitated constant
communications during wartime conditions between battle management cell
and forward deployed personnel
- Proactive! Assisted in Network Operations work center reconfiguration,
rearranged TAOC server room
equipment and relocated various supplies and tools--increased space for
maintenance and training by 40%
-- Constructed scaled down version of TAOC network for training of new
personnel--training enhanced
- Developed engineering solutions for constantly changing theater network and
communications requirements
-- Directly involved with implementation of most efficient network design
topology ever in the Southwest Asia
- Authored network section's repair guide--stating proper standards and
procedures of network troubleshooting
-- reduced network
troubleshooting and down time by 20%--guaranteeing continuous network
connectivity
- Provided category five
termination training to four Core
workcenter personnel--training saved
eight hours of
manpower by empowering newly trained personnel to cable up
42 computer clients on Training
AOC floor
- Extremely talented! Diligently
installed backup Theater Battle Management Core Systems suite for CAOC
creating a unique networking schematic used to patch spare servers onto
live system with no interruptions
- Installed Voice Over Internet Protocol (VOIP) telephone system in training
center--enabled technicians to
train on equipment before deploying and operating mission essential
equipment--achieved VOIP certification
SIGNIFICANT SELF-IMPROVEMENT:
- Dedicated to physical fitness--achieved an amazing 100 composite score on new
Air Force fitness program,
placed in upper two
percent of the squadron; formally recognized by the squadron commander in June
2005
- Driven towards higher education; completed two classes though St. Leo
University--Maintained a 4.0 G.P.A
-- awarded
nine credit hours towards
completion of Community College of the Air Force Associates Degree
- Attended commercial Network Management Software Course; trained four
technicians on new skills learned
- Awarded Distinguished Graduate upon completing Air Operations Center Initial
Qualification Training course
BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
-Donated notebooks and other needed items to local <NAME> County school
district's "Back on the Bus" program
-- materials collected
provide much needed school supplies to underprivileged children in 31 local
schools
- Strong supporter of squadron activities; played in the ###th Combat Operations
Squadrons booster club's golf
tournament--activity helped raise over a $1,000 in funds to offset the
cost of the annual holiday party for unit
- Volunteered 16 hours building local Habitat for Humanity homes; saved project
over $160 in labor expenses
Notes:
This is a good package. It read well, but there were some mistakes
that made it tricky at times. When writing bullets, we need to keep in
mind that they are not complete
sentances. There were a couple bullets that either tip-toed this or were.
Also, if a bullet is hard to read it will normally be skipped and little or no
points will be assigned. The second bullet's sub-bullet fit this in my
opinion. You can pick out the facts but it is a very hard bullet to read.
There were not any spelling errors
only some capitalization issues. As well as those, there were
numbering errors as well.
The numbering errors are very common in Air Force Writing as one can see within
the examples on the site. The key to numbering can be simple. All
numbers under 10 are spelled out unless they have to do with time, then use the
numeric form. Additionally, when a number higher than 10 is used in a clause,
all numbers in the clause (bullet part) are numeric. (The basis for
the correction is derived from the Tongue and
Quill)
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