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Enlisted Recognition Program (Airman of the Year)

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The following Example has been taken from an AF1206 - IMT so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

- Deployed 45 days to Combined Air Operations Center (CAOC) <BASE>, in direct support of Blue Flag 05-02
  -- Greatly contributed to exercise success by providing a modern, high-speed coalition network to participants
- Configured multi-layer switching network equipment to support over 500 clients during exercise Blue Flag 05
  -- Meticulously administered four networks to support 517 US operators and 88 coalition partners to quickly
      accomplish 1,620 combat air strike sorties; enabled US and coalition target integration of air tasking orders

- 1st picked by element leadership out of 15 peers for special contingency deployment to Al-Udied CAOC
  -- Ran and labeled 25K+ feet of fiber optic networking cable--quickly created 850 new network access points
  -- Worked 48 hours dedicated to restructuring CAOC local area network cables reducing cable traffic by 10%
- Isolated and repaired four CISCO router central processing units by reconfiguring corrupted operating systems;
  prevented units from being sent to CISCO repair depot and saved Air Force over $80 in part acquisition costs
- Troubleshot and repaired Video Teleconferencing system--isolated problem to improper connections leading
  to signal loss--enabled Blue Flag 05-02 players to conference with six sites and Secretary of the Air Force
- Lead technician in Secure Internet Protocol Network (SIPR) information assurance security assessment scan
  -- troubleshot 175 vulnerabilities--repaired all discrepancies in the Training Air Operations Center (TAOC)
- Assisted in the in the installation and configuration of five SIPR computer clients to United States Central Air
  Forces network--increased availability of classified command and control terminals to flight personnel by 20%
- Installed new fiber path/switch supporting Intelligence Cell’s AccessNet radio system--facilitated constant
  communications during wartime conditions between battle management cell and forward deployed personnel
- Proactive! Assisted in Network Operations work center reconfiguration, rearranged TAOC server room
  equipment and relocated various supplies and tools--increased space for maintenance and training by 40%
  -- Constructed scaled down version of TAOC network for training of new personnel--training enhanced
- Developed engineering solutions for constantly changing theater network and communications requirements
  -- Directly involved with implementation of most efficient network design topology ever in the Southwest Asia
- Authored network section's repair guide--stating proper standards and procedures of network troubleshooting
  -- reduced network troubleshooting and down time by 20%--guaranteeing continuous network connectivity
- Provided category five termination training to four Core workcenter personnel--training saved eight hours of
  manpower by empowering newly trained personnel to cable up 42 computer clients on Training AOC floor
- Extremely talented! Diligently installed backup Theater Battle Management Core Systems suite for CAOC
  creating a unique networking schematic used to patch spare servers onto live system with no interruptions

- Installed Voice Over Internet Protocol (VOIP) telephone system in training center--enabled technicians to
  train on equipment before deploying and operating mission essential equipment--achieved VOIP certification

- Dedicated to physical fitness--achieved an amazing 100 composite score on new Air Force fitness program,
  placed in upper two percent of the squadron; formally recognized by the squadron commander in June 2005
- Driven towards higher education; completed two classes though St. Leo University--Maintained a 4.0 G.P.A
  -- awarded nine credit hours towards completion of Community College of the Air Force Associates Degree
- Attended commercial Network Management Software Course; trained four technicians on new skills learned
- Awarded Distinguished Graduate upon completing Air Operations Center Initial Qualification Training course

-Donated notebooks and other needed items to local <NAME> County school district's "Back on the Bus" program
  -- materials collected provide much needed school supplies to underprivileged children in 31 local schools
- Strong supporter of squadron activities; played in the ###th Combat Operations Squadrons booster club's golf
  tournament--activity helped raise over a $1,000 in funds to offset the cost of the annual holiday party for unit
- Volunteered 16 hours building local Habitat for Humanity homes; saved project over $160 in labor expenses


 This is a good package.  It read well, but there were some mistakes that made it tricky at times.  When writing bullets, we need to keep in mind that they are not complete sentances. There were a couple bullets that either tip-toed this or were.  Also, if a bullet is hard to read it will normally be skipped and little or no points will be assigned.  The second bullet's sub-bullet fit this in my opinion.  You can pick out the facts but it is a very hard bullet to read.  There were not any spelling errors only some capitalization issues.  As well as those, there were  numbering errors as well.  The numbering errors are very common in Air Force Writing as one can see within the examples on the site.  The key to numbering can be simple.  All numbers under 10 are spelled out unless they have to do with time, then use the numeric form. Additionally, when a number higher than 10 is used in a clause, all numbers in the clause (bullet part) are numeric. (The basis for the correction is derived from the Tongue and Quill)

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