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Civilian of the Quarter (3rd Quarter)

Award Cat: Civilian CGS-09 and above
Winner: ???

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The following civilian award example has been taken from an AF1206 - IMT so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (Money gathered pays for hosting and domain fees plus site growth items.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

-Coordinated technical solution for STRATCOM Defense Red Switch phone requirements. New phones provide secure dedicated conference and hotline capability for global strategic forces for Air Operations Center.
-Continued project management of DoD pilot project to provide outdoor, wireless access to Secret Internet Protocol Router Network. Provides critical, real-time, classified data to wing command and control authorities. Important lessons learned from this project will guide deployment of similar systems throughout the DoD.
-Administers system processing all communications requirements for ##BW and 32 tenant units. Vital end of year process approves all communications purchases. Ensures new equipment compatability and logistical support.
-Hand picked to become base administrator for new ACC web based communications requirements processing system. Organized team to analyze system behavior and integrate existing processes prior to implementation.
-Oversaw preparation of over 150 military personnel postered for deployment in AEF 9-10. Developed plan for mobility folder review for over 300 personnel. Greatly reduces last minute deployment complications.
-Developed design for concealed Protected Distribution System providing physical security for classified networks. Used in renovation of building 6237 and encorporated into design guide for future construction.
-Conducted review and consolidated inputs for several vital disaster response, base support and operational plans. Ensures flights understand their roles under any contigency and vital communications support is provided.
-Provided group and wing leadership with much needed information regarding the feasibility and impact of new $38M consolidated communications facility considering $10M donation from local business community.

-Planned and taught 9 personnel on the Communications Infrastructure Planning System. Increased understanding of planning and funding processes of base communications systems. System guides ACC funding decisions.
-Organized unit raquetball challenge ladder tournament. Encouraged increased physical fitness and conditioning.
-Attended 8 hour base administrator training for Project, Workflow, Requirements and Resources system. Using knowledge gained, developing base training program for technicians and unit telecommunications officers.
-Attended 40 hour, Armed Forces Communications and Electronics Association, Terrestrial and Wireless Networking and Trends course. Knowledge gained will help steer base long range planning for years to come.
-Organized group of 8 volunteers to work with Habitat for Humanity and take part in constructing a home for a needy family. Group learned basic construction skills and techniques that will aid them in future projects.
-Volunteered programming skills to aid in the development of a web portal for remote villages in South America. Project increases accessability of internet resources in locations where internet was previously unavailable. Aids more conventional assistance efforts by keeping lines of communication and support open.
- Went door to door to initiated nieghborhood clothing drive for Hurricane Katrina evacuees. Combined drive with local business resulted in 2 truck loads of clothing, toys, diapers and other needed items.


I have a slanted view of this package.  There are way too many spelling errors, take the time and run spell check.  The structure is off as well but this is easily over looked because it is a Civilian package (Use Bullet Writing (PPT developed at Brooks) as an education tool).  With that said, there should still be a space separating the dash from the first letter of the bullet.  Also, many of the sentances are passive.  Active verbs would greatly enhance the overall read ability of the award. Further dissecting the award package, there are a couple of numbering issues but they are minor (the numbers should have been spelled out).  Also, STRATCOM is actually USSTRATCOM and the COCOM ought to be identified appropriately.  Final note, not all packages need to be well written or winners.  The fact the individual was recognized is the most important aspect of the award system.


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